writers workshop

Hannah gave me a four. I would have to agree with her on this score though. Reading back over my essay after talking about certain things such as thesis, summarizing, and giving textual support, I am almost emberassed to say that i wrote this essay. I did have a clear thesis; however, the rest of my essay did not exactly hit on with the stated thesis. I could have used much more textual support (and a better understanding of the excerpt given). A major problem I tend to have in any given essay topic about a certain peice of literature is summarizing. I am the queen of summarization. For some reason I always think that the reader needs to know every little detail that happened in the excerpt stapled to the front of my essay. Also, reading others papers has made me realize that my vocabulary sucks. (see what i mean...i just used the word "sucks"). I dont really know what I could do to help that problem though. One last main thing that i think i could improve in my writing is gathering just a few ideas to write about in my paper. Usually when given an essay topic, thousands of ideas rush into my head, so i then try to put them all in my writing which makes my essay look unorganized. If i could learn to pick 2 to 3 ideas to focus on in my paper i feel like that would improve my writing immensley.